Thanks for all the comments about my poem and to all who took time and effort to visit back. Yesterday was a disaster, I felt sick with back pain, stomach pain and I became a total pain in the ass for myself.
Today I woke up at 1:00PM and walked straight into the toilet and my ugly, unshaven face scared the shit out of me. Thought I will shave but as it makes little difference and I am not going out for at least another couple of days. The procrastinator in me woke up and distracted me off it. Then I remembered this poem I wrote in 1999 in Ft-Lauderdale, FL. As I am working on two different poems which is not complete yet, I hope you all will enjoy this one.
Epitaph Of The Lonely Stranger.
My first love left me, with blame on me,
Then I saw a lonely stranger smiling at me,
My second love left me, with blame on me,
Then I saw the lonely stranger laugh,
When I left the third one,
He celebrated my loss, a whole year.
Now alone trying to laugh away the pain,
But the more I laugh,
More tears fill my eyes,
More fragile becomes the folds of my heart,
And the lonely stranger still celebrates,
He who gave all the misconceptions,
He who intelligently made me wrong,
He added weight, when I went lean,
He who lives in me, with me , all my life,
But every word of love to me, hurts him,
The more loved I am, the more he bleeds,
Hey, beauty by the road side,
Let your first word of love to me, be,
An epitaph of the lonely stranger.
©RIAZAHAMMED.COM. This poem was written in Ft-Lauderdale, FL.
It was released on the web as part of the first poems in the pilot run of LonelyPoet.Com.
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Hey it’s me again, spygurlrouge. I’m sorry I haven’t posted the second chapter, BUT I’ve decided to make a propostition instead. If you can critique my first chapter (you can be harsh, I’m used to it), and perhaps help me change any mistakes you might think I have, I’ll post my second chapter. Do we have an accord?
(By the way, I love your poem, and I’m not just saying that so you’ll say yes to my proposition, honest. )
Wow, that was fast! Do you still feel like shit? Sorry, if you do…Hope you get to feeling better soon. Oh, and don’t worry about the whole critiquing thing. If you don’t want to do it, you don’t have to. You just seem really genuine and intelligent, so I figured I’d at least ask for your help.
This is going to sound SUPER corny, but that quote thing you wrote at the end of your entry actually made my eyes well up! I love it, did you make it up yourself?
am Okay… I think… Still cant sit properly so I am lying down on my belly now.
This one you are talking about.
“The Signature Of A True Human Is The Smile He/She Brings On The Face Of Others.” Yes I wrote it myself as a signature for my e-mail.
The Signature Of A True Human Is The Smile He/She Brings On The Face Of Others.
LonelyPoet.
“An epitaph of the lonely stranger.” sooo love that…hope you feel better soon!
Hi there, thank u for yet again a lovely bit of poetry. Much love Elenni x
Danke for the comment! *glomps*
thanks for the comment.
i love your poems too, i am subscribing
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Ouch, judging by your comment, it doesn’t SEEM like you’re doing much better…Anyway, I can’t believe you wrote that saying yourself! I hope I can write one that good some day. Anyway, I’ll be waiting by my computer for your next comment. (Of course, feel free to take a break until tommorow if you need too. You know, you really don’t seem to good if you’re having to lie down on stomach right now…)
good title. i like that a lot. how old are you? too many broken hearts are in the world. its sad to think we dwell instead of fix them.
Hey thanx for the comment the other day… uhm yea things are better i guess but i hope they keep getting better… when we fall down we must get back up… but yet what goes up must come down… so i jsut believe there is a reason for everything… thanx again… Ariel..ps…..how old are you?… and are you a guy or a girl?
Thanks for commenting on my site. Sorry it took so long for me to get back to you.
The poem made me cry. So honest and sad.
V.
ok your in just stop on by!
WOW that was amazing i loved the poem thanx so much… and sorry i didtn see how old you were on here its been a long day.. but thanx again and god bless…
hey thnx for the comment…lol. I read some of your poetry–i really like your style–props for that….
Feel better soon homie no need having a man down.
*sigh*
Hey hun, hope u feel better soon, thanx for the comments, ur poetry always makes me smile, thank u so much, Elenni x x x x x x x
Thank you so much for your help! Yeah, the truth about the characters is that I really didn’t know where I was going with them. For example, should I make Emma seem poor, or should she seem nicely dressed? I don’t know!!!!! Well, the truth is, I’m not sure if I’m even going to write anymore on that story. It’s getting so that it’s becoming really weird (even weirder than the concept itself), and is spinning out of control. (You know, it’s starting to sound stupid or something. )
I’m writing another story for a contest right now, so if you want that, feel free to ask for it. If you REALLY want to see chapter 2, just tell me, but I’ve got to warn you, it gets pretty retarded and strange…
i like your writings
Thanks for the comments. Great writing – Epitaph Of The Lonely Stranger
Get as much rest as possible. Positive Vibes!
Take care,
Gabe
yes it is a good movie! it really inspires me to write romantic stuff like that.
your poem, is remarkable.
hah stalkers hmm? Yeah this girl isn’t a stalker but she IS nosy. She doesn’t need to read this xanga but whatever she never will now!
yup its in scotland. Three Sisters Glencoe pass Scotland to be exact.
beautiful isn’t it?i just love them.
i like ur new poem : )
hey, i like your poetry. your style is very clean and flowing and mature. good stuff. check out my site. i just posted my first poem. tell me what you think lol
hey that’s awesome, poetry rocks…and god does too 🙂 so you a christian?
I hope you feel better soon.And once again a great poem!
wow, i never met a muslim b4…but i respect that. so what exactly do you believe in when it comes to religion? you don’t have to reply if you don’t want to, but i’m just curious what muslims believe. take care . . .